peer review 1 evan

WRITER: EVAN BEARD
Research Question/Roadmap
Does it pose a question? Does the paper identify tensions? Does it say what it’s going to do and what its point is?
· He doesn’t state it in question form but he wants to know why students go out and participate in such risky and dangerous activities such as partying. The tension is between the cops and the underage drinking and being the one nobody knows at the party and having people stare at you because they know you are an unfamiliar face.
Theme
What is the quality of the content of the writing: the ideas, perceptions, and point of view? In your words, what is being said? Is it more than a collection of thoughts and observations? According to the author, why does this whole thing matter?
· He shows the typical party scene at BSU. He talks about the underage drinking and how there are other options of activity other than the house parties that are throw. He talks about what goes on in the party such as the beer pong game and the pranks they pull on people who fall asleep. It matters because this is information that a person who has never been to a house party would want to know.
Is there too much abstraction or generalization? Underline or circle this language in the paper. In other words, are there so few details, examples and explanations that it ends up dull, empty, and impossible to experience? Or, perhaps even impossible to understand? Explain.
· No, he gives detailed descriptions and he walks you through the whole night of activities.
Are there too little abstraction or generalization and too much clutter of details, examples, and explanations? Too little standing back for perspective? Too little forest per tree?
· I think he should talk more about his thought on that first night at the rugby house and his judgments or if he thought people judged him.
What is the practical significance of the artifact? What idea does it represent?
· The artifact was the cup they used to play beer pong and it represents the games they play at the party. Its one the main events when you first walk through the party.
What is the significance of Interview 1?
· Piece was the owner of the house so he knew what was going in in the house and when the parties were and he could answer all the questions involved around the activities that were going on in the house and some of the people. He talks about why they have the parties and why he drinks alcohol.
What is the significance of Interview 2?
· She tells how her background effects the decisions she makes like drinking and partying. She explains why she party and why she drinks alcohol for a confidence boost.
Are all 3 required scholarly sources developed in the conclusions?
· Yes
Is all source material cited according to MLA, both parenthetically and in a Works Cited?
· yes
Do the conclusions satisfy the issues the study raises with complexity? How so?
· He used the sources to explain and get into depth of the points he’s making.
Structure
Is the whole thing unified? Is there a central idea to which everything pertains? What? Are there loose ends that don’t seem purposefully so, but accidently overlooked?
· I think he chose the right example and interviewees because they all tie together.
Are the parts arranged in a coherent, logical narrative sequence?
· yes
Were the paragraphs really paragraphs? Could you tell what each one was saying? Did they function as helpful and comfortable units of thought, not too much, not too little? Mark any that seem too short or too long.
· They were pretty good length not too long that they were dragging.
Language
Are the sentences clear and readable? Underline with a wavy line any that you find incorrect or confusing.
· yes
Are the words used correctly? List any misused words.
· no
Is it succinct enough? Not too long, repetitious or dull? Mark any areas for deletion.
· No
Is it full enough? Or does the writer squeeze out the juice of human communication and spoken discourse? Is the language, even if correct, dull and indigestible? Does the writer sufficiently use the language of the subculture?
· He uses the slang that the people used around him and nicknames
Does the diction, mood and level of formality fit with ethnography?
· I think he should talk about some of the wild things or outrageous that happened at the different parties.
Readerly Response
Describe what was happening to you as you read. Tell which words or phrases stuck out or resonated.
· I like the way he mentions the slang and when he talks about how they put “x” on your face if you fall asleep. It really reminded me of the parties I went to while being here at Ball State. I also remembered times when my roommate would come home talking about what went on at the rugby house.
What happened and what are the implications?

What ideas or beliefs or feelings were brought into this piece? How do multiple points of view contribute to your understanding?
· The idea of alcohol and partying being a stress reliever. And you never know who you may become friends with.
What understanding of the culture do you have from reading this piece? What gave you this understanding?
· College students’ party for many reasons and when they all come together to one location you see the many personalities. People drink for many reasons like just to hang with friends or forget about stressors that are happening in your life. Sometimes drinking can get out of hand and maybe he could have told about a time if he saw someone getting into a fight or hurling.
The writer has introduced him/herself to you. Describe that meeting. What’s your impression? Did he thrust out his hand for you to shake? Did she sidle up next to you, but fail to look you in the eye? Did he send you a letter bomb or put his arm around your shoulder? Does it seem like the writer is standing on a cliff talking down to an audience below? What sense of the writer do you have? Formal? Casual? Intimate? Jocular? Arrogant? Are you with the writer, against her, or unsure since you don’t really know him?
· The writer seems like a laid back guy who wants to party. He’s not very shy because he went to a house where he knew no one. And he met up with a girl he didn’t even know that well and they talked for hours.
Is the writer giving in?
What do you want, need, or wish for?
· I want to hear more about what he sees random people doing or if there was an occurrence with the police

conclusion questions

What do you make of your experience?
This experience has taught me how to open my mind to new situations. I know that you can't live by what you were brought up to learn because sometimes people can be wrong. Never be afraid to learn new things. I I learned that it takes time to get someone to trust you and you have to be able to show them that you want to learn more about them. I learned that you have to ask questions if you want to find out information.

What is it like to be apart of your subculture's community?
Being apart of the the track and field throwers not only allowed me to meet new friends but made me feel like im not and outside anymore. I like coming around and they call me by my first name or the nicknames they have given me. It has really made me feel like im apart of their family. I have learned that you dont do things because of your appearance but because the love you have for it.

Describe the way you have represented them?
I showed how the girls are determined and love what they do. The paper will show the love they have for one another and how they strive to be the best they can be. It shows that women have the ability to do the same thing men are capable to do. I describe the obstacles they go through and how they overcome them. The paper not only shows the hardworking part of the girls but some of things they do outside of throwing. I also point out the stereotypes and if they are ethical or not.

Do you have the authority? Why or Why not?
I wouldnt say I have the authority to represent but I would say I have the ability. I have been knowing most of the team since track has started and once I started doing field notes and going to meets I have learned and seen alot about the girls. I have gotten to know some of their personal thoughts and have gladly learned many personalities. I can fully represent them to anyone and I know that they would agree.

Box 21 feedback

One thing I know I need to do is ask more questions that the informant can elaborate on. I think I did very well but I think could have asked some more closed questions like where are you from and how old are you. (even though I knew that information already but others did not.) I feel like I asked very good questions and this review helped me think of more questions I could have asked to learn more about the subculture.

verbal art

The verbal art for the throwers would be happiness and determination.
The culture revealed is how hard the girls work and the dedication they give to their interest of the sport. They are happy at all times because they know their trying their best to be the best and do the best they can.
It is important to me because I like when people show that hard work can pay off and the saying practice makes perfect. Its important to the group because they love the sport so much that it means alot to them to get notice for what they have practiced for so long. And to show boys that they arent the only ones strong at heart and mind. And its importan t to indiana because they are representing indiana when they go to meets and compete.

Questions for Interviewees

I am going to interview Lywanna Melvin and Emily.

1. What caught your interest on throwing
2. Whats your favorite weight to throw and why
3. whats the hardest part of throwing and why
4. what is your most memorable experience in throwing
5. Do you get along with your teammates
6. How Dangerous do you think the sports id and have you ever got injured or seen anybody get injured
7. What do you do special to get ready for practice or a meet
8. Are there ever any tension between players from different events about who does the best event
9. What are your feelings about how the media doesn't show professional throwing like they show all the other sports
10. Do you perfer a male or female coach and why
11. Can you name a time where you weren't notice for your hard work
12. Whats harder college or high school throwing and why
13. How long have you been throwing
14. What do you think makes up a great thrower and do you consider yourself a great thrower
15. Are competitive towards your teammates
16. Do you think practicing has helped you get any better
17. how often do you try to help your teammates im prove your technique
18. Is there anybody you look up to that motivates you to keep throwing
19. Do you think size matter in throwing (body type)
20. Do you think you can make a career out of the sport
21. Have you heard any stereotypes about girls who throw and if so what were they

practice interview

Sara Starkey is Caucasian with medium length brown hair and blue eyes. She's very straight forward and organized. She doesn't talks as much but she will get her point across. She lives in Dyer, Indiana and graduated from Lake Central High School. She has one older brother and he lives in Pittsburgh and she sees him like 4 - 5 times a year. In her spare time at home she would volunteer at her church by doing crafts or helping out with dinners. She loves to read and mentioned that she has so many books that she ran out of bookshelves in her room. On her graduation day her mother gave her two necklaces as gifts and she wears them everyday. She says her mother is her best friend.
She now attends Ball State University and she is majoring in History and Education. She wants to pursue a career as a librarian or a teacher. She went on a trip in 8th grade to museums and she was very intrigued so from then on she wanted to be an librarian. She takes 18 credit hours and she is involved in a group called Circle K, which is a volunteer group that helps raise money for causes. She has met 5 good friends here at Ball State.

ARTICLE SUMMARIES

Constantinou, Phoebe, Manson, Mara, Silverman, Stephen wrote "Female Students' Perceptions About Gender - Role Stereotypes and Their Influence on Attitude Toward Physical Education" in Spring 2009. The thesis is about how females are getting involved in more physical activity. The article explains how gender impairs people judgement about if they should involve themselves in sports. It mainly talks about 7th and 8th grade students in a suburban school. But you can relate this study to any age group. It talks about how female are far more competitive than males. "Gender is a socially constructed pattern behavior" It is hard to change social patterns and it will be different to change because each social and economic group is different. And it will be a hard process to change. The study showed that the safer the environment was the more the females would participate. I agree with this article because the girls in my subculture are very competitive but the sport that they chose to get involved in is dangerous. I could use this source to explain the importance of what it means to the girls to participate in throwing and how they work as hard as men and how all females don't like t play it safe.

Peter Donnelly of McMaster University and Kevin Young of University of Calgary wrote "The Construction and Confirmation of Identity in Sport Subcultures" in 1988. The thesis of the article states that the roles and identities of members of subcultures should not be thought of as static positions and entities. All subcultures are different and each of them have the own rules and regulations to follow and new recruitment have to go through the different task to become apart of the group. Many subcultures go through the different "career stages" such as presocialization which is all the information an individual acquires about a specific subculture prior to initial participation in the subculture. Selection and Recruitment which is a more flexible stage because it can be renewed if a new comer is geographically mobile and wants to maintain a membership. And at this stage new individuals can become apart of the subculture. Socialization is when an initially active but ongoing stage wherein members undergo training in the characteristics of the subculture. In this stage they learn to adopt the values and perspectives of the group. And the last stage is Acceptance and Ostracism is when the members of the subculture of your choice accepts everything about you and they learn your values and interest like you did with the first stage of the process. This article helped me understand more about how to approach my subculture and how to understand them more. I know that every individual is different but when they come together as a whole they share the same values and beliefs. And now I know that those are the aspects to construct a subculture and that's how they get along with one another. And although many subcultures are able to tolerate diversity, there are some critical aspects for which little tolerance is allowed.

Shelly A. McGrath of University of Alabama and Ruth A. Chananie-Hill of University of Northern Iowa wrote "Big Freaky Women": Normalizing Gender Transgression Through Bodybuilding. This article focuses on the aspect of female bodybuilding. The authors were trying to see if the way women are build have an affect on their everyday lives and are they perceived differently from the petite and girlie women. In the article the authors observed ten female bodybuilders to see how their appearance affects what goes on in their life. One of the builders was a woman named Carla she is mixed with African American and Ghanaian. And she said "My family gives me a hard time because of the increase in my muscularity and my dedication to the sport ". She has to consider her family values as well as her own beliefs and they contradict with one another because Americans do things different from her country. And another woman named Bev mentioned that her brothers would make fun of her body because of their Palestinian views regarding female gender roles. Most of the women continued to do bodybuilding even though it their cultural backgrounds don't agree with their decision. The article explains some of the stereotypes and biases that I had of my subculture. The girls don't participate in the sports because of how they look, they do it because they love to play it or their interest out weighs the opinions of outsiders.

field notes week 3

Observations 3:05 they stretched as a whole team · The coaches weren’t around yet · While they put on their shoes in a circle, they talked about boys, home, and told jokes · Talk “trash” to the other groups especially the sprinters · 3:38 the coach finally approached the group and tells them what they will do today in practice · The coach joked around with the girls · They let me feel how heavy each weight was · A senior threw her last indoor throw · After practicing throwing they had to run a lap and they coach asked them sarcastically are the feeling good · As they learned new events for the outdoor meets the coach encourages them · Two of the girls are sitting down waiting for the rest of the girls to finish the workouts

Reflections · It surprised me because they usually workout in their event types · They continue with their daily routine as if the coaches were there · They made me feel like I’m a part of the group · They show how competitive they are and emphasizes how they are the best event in track and field · I thought they already knew what they had to do by the way they started practice by themselves · He tries to make them feel comfortable doing the new events so they won’t think about throwing so much · I was intrigued on how they can throw such a heavy object around · It was a far throw and she seemed to be nonchalant about it but it’s probably because she doesn’t say much in practice · Their faces looked so tiring · They actually looked like their having fun surprising by and they do better each time he compliments · I found out the two girls sitting down are going to the championship conference and they coach doesn’t want them to hurt themselves in practice. That shows accomplishment.

Box 16

The first thing I noticed when I walk in the field sports building was the smell. It smelled like tar or outside of a construction site. Sometimes I would think about how you open up a new Basketball out of the box and it smells like rubber. The lights are bright and it was a cool breeze coming from the doors on each side of the rectangular room. The track in in the middle of the room. Each event had a section to practice on the track and around the room. MY subculture practiced in the back of the track going north when you enter the room. The setup takes up almost half of the track. The floor looks dusty as if people walk on it all day.

focal point

The focal point in my field notes is the communication that the throwers have with each other and the coach in the workout room. When doing workouts you seen smiles around the room and determination in their faces. Each girl goes straight to the machine they want as if it is a routine which I assumed. The gestures of a pat on the back or shoulder that the coach gives them shows them that they are doing a good job. Even though after the work they have sweat trickling from their faces. Even though some of the girls look like they are runners because of their appearance such as the skinny body structure. But they lift the heavy weights as if its no problem. Listening to the weights bang on the machines and the music playing in the background for that full hour showed good sportsmanship and perseverance and i was very intrigued by it. They only thing that was left unwanted was the disgusting smell of sweat and body odors but other than that it was surprising interesting.

• How does working out help you with throwing?
• Once upon a time you were new to this routine, so was it hard at first and can you give me an example of a hard time you had with the routine?
• Do you think your teammates are supportive and helpful and if so how have they helped you?
  

Box 7

Her notes are good but it doesnt really tell where they were. And I they fact that she told what they wore and how they behaved wit each other. She mentioned that there wasn't enough diversity and that didnt surprise me much. She should have put more of their reactions to the topics they were talking about. she told how people sat and tallked to only the people on their floors and how she was disgusted by that. i would have like to know more about the leaders of the groups and its members. And the evnts that go on in the meetings. But the points she made gave meinformation that I had no idea about.

Box 13

I have 2 artifacts so far and one of them are shoes of a thrower. The shoes have certain flavors to them and the colors can have different meaning to the individuals. I automatically assumed that that was the throwers favorite color but I was wrong. Blue meant peace for one girl and red was school spirit. Yellow made one girl happy. There was a signature on the shoe of a famous thrower with a record number. That shows that the shoes isn't just a ordinary shoe. The signature just might encourage the thrower. The other thing was a disk. They can show the personality of the thrower because they can decorate them. It shows the different things about them and how they are unique from one another. The have colors, words, pictures, and all sorts of decor.

Box 15

I visited my fieldsite in the afternoon. When I got into the building it was very warm and the lights seemed dim. I noticed the throwers were waiting on the wall for practice to start. The coaches were having a conversation until 3:00 came. The room was field with conversation and laughter while they went through their daily laps and exercise. I noticed how the helped each other get through the workout.
The throwers have their on section at the end of the track. Once the coach set up the throwing ring all the throwers got their weight and got in line to weight their turn. As they waited their turn some of them practice their technique and some just talk to each other. They each took about three throws a apiece and the coach had a private conversation with each of them after their throws.
I look at the tired faces after the hour and a half practice. When the coach gave them permission to leave you could see a facial expression of relief on their face because practice was finally over. Exicted to see what will happen in the next practice my mind is filled curiosity and wonder.

Field Notes week one

Observed

Reaction

· As I walked in the field sports building at 2:58 the throwers were lined up against the wall. · They started doing their 4 laps around the track by 3:00. They were in groups talking while they ran. · The coach sets up the throwing ring inside the track at the end. · When the girls started warming up they practiced the techniques. I noticed most of them practicing the spinning technique. · Every time the girls threw the weight they made a loud noise. · After each throw the coach talks to them to tell them what they can do to throw farther or he’s congratulating them on how far they threw. · They measure the weight where ever it hits the floor with a long piece of measuring tape. · After practice there is a team meeting

· Maybe it was a procedure that they went through before practice or I thought they were going to do wall sits. · They have friendships with each other and the talking seemed as if it helped them get through the running faster. · The throwing is about to begin. I’m surprised it’s not that hard to set up the throwing area. · There are 2 techniques to throwing and the spinning technique is the hardest. Were they aiming for perfection? · The weight must be straining them. I wonder if their arms hurt after each throw. The sound they make makes me shake in the inside because it’s an unpleasant sound to listen to. Some were louder than others. · The makes sure he can help them with whatever he can to improve their throwing. · Knowing the measurement of the throw is very important. It seems as if they try to throw farther than what they threw the previous throw. · They reflect what went on in practice. The laugh about some of things that went on at the previous meet. The coach tells them when the next meet will be and what will going on the rest of the week.

Counseling Center Presentaton

The presentation was very informational. I like playing the game that gave us an idea of what our personality was like. We answered questions from four categories that compared two personality types. My personality type was ENFP. But I can see myself being other personality types!! They told us this activity was something like the Myers Briggs. "Myers Briggs is a self report instrument about how you feel about yourself" said Desiree Howell. They really taught us about how we can determine what type of personalty we have and how you can tell if the test was right about your personality by asking yourself DO I DO THAT? If I could go through that presentation again I would.

Peer Review #2

Your Name: Sena Strong

Writer’s Name: Sara Starkey

Does the writer state a thesis at the end of the first paragraph that explains why s/he wants to study a particular subculture and does s/he make a claim about how his or her view of that subculture has been formed? If you can’t find a thesis point this out here.

If you can find a thesis, rewrite the thesis here:
Yes, there is a thesis, “I want to research the Hall Council and see if my stereotypes are proven wrong or not.”


Does the thesis make an argument that a reasonable person could disagree with? If yes, what? If no, suggest a thesis based on the paper.
Yes, this thesis does make an argument, the group can agree or disagree with her assumptions and stereotypes.

What subculture is named in the paper?
Residence Hall Council

Could the thesis need to be more concise or more complex?
She should have mentioned her own stereotypes about the council instead of mentioning them in gerenal.
Is the thesis specific enough to have meaning? Make a suggestion that pushes the language towards more specific meaning:
yes, it is very clear what she wants to do with her study.

How does the essay address the writer’s fixed position in connection with his or her potential subculture? Quote from the paper to explain.
She has no problems with studying her subculture and observing them. “With myself being a nineteen year old female I do not think that this will influence my fieldwork…”.


What does the writing tell you about this student’s subjective position? Quote from the paper to explain.
“I do pass by the front desk every day, but I do not know the person who works there.”



What does the writing tell you about this student’s textual position?
Quote from the paper to explain.
She show’s what she wants to learn and what type of stereotypes she has. “They were probably in student council and honor society in high school”


Does the essay seem like a story or does it seem too formal? Suggest where narrative elements might serve as good examples.
She should tell how her RA interacts with her and put more background information


Does each paragraph seem to be an appropriate length, with only one main idea per paragraph? If not, what specific suggestions do you have to make this paper better organized?
Yes, the paragraphs are the appropriate length, each paragraph has a certain topic and facts to support
but it needs to be more descriptive.


What suggestions do you have to make the content of this paper better?
Make the paper more exciting to read. Add more interesting things the council does for fun. What she sees the council do?



What do you think the strength of this paper is?
Her curiosity about the Residence Hall Council and her stereotypes.



What are the weaknesses?




What’s missing?
Personal experiences and be more descriptive. .

What’s unnecessary?

Mark on the manuscript any important grammar/spelling mistakes.

Fill out the following chart, adding your comments about each component.

CRITERIA


READER'S COMMENTS
Weak Satisf. Strong

_____ ___ __ __x___ Thesis: clear, important, risky
Comments:

_____ _____ __x___ Evidence: relevance, strength, credibility

Comments:

_____ _____ __x___ Organization: arrangement of ideas, guiding the reader
Comments:

_____ ___x__ _____ Mechanics: spelling, grammar, punctuation

Comments:
_____ _____ __x___ Overall effectiveness: Was the relationship between the author’s background and their subculture clear? Were you convinced of the effects?
Comments:

Peer Review #1

Your Name: Delia Welsh

Writer’s Name: Sena Strong

Does the writer state a thesis at the end of the first paragraph that explains why s/he wants to study a particular subculture and does s/he make a claim about how his or her view of that subculture has been formed? If you can’t find a thesis point this out here.

If you can find a thesis, rewrite the thesis here: My reason for wanting to study and do fieldwork on this subculture is because I am interested in this organization. I want to know if they are caring and if they have your will at heart.

Does the thesis make an argument that a reasonable person could disagree with? If yes, what? If no, suggest a thesis based on the paper.

Yes, because not all sororities have your will at heart and every sorority community is different. And people could argue if its true or not.

What subculture is named in the paper?

Sororities

Could the thesis need to be more concise or more complex?

No it states what she will talk about in the paper and what she wants to find out throughout her research.

Is the thesis specific enough to have meaning? Make a suggestion that pushes the language towards more specific meaning:

Yes

How does the essay address the writer’s fixed position in connection with his or her potential subculture? Quote from the paper to explain.

Yes the sorority is for all female age groups. “my best friend decided to rush as a freshmen”

What does the writing tell you about this student’s subjective position? Quote from the paper to explain.

Her friends are in the sorority and they will inform her on some of the things that sororities do in general. “Meredith and Sarah can show me what to expect and help me understand more about the subculture”

What does the writing tell you about this student’s textual position?

Quote from the paper to explain.

She knows what goes on during rush week. “You have your new dresses and everything to impress the recruiters”

Does the essay seem like a story or does it seem too formal? Suggest where narrative elements might serve as good examples.

It seems like she telling a story. “When I came home from winter break I never I haven’t seen or talked to my best friend since she’s been in the sorority”

Does each paragraph seem to be an appropriate length, with only one main idea per paragraph? If not, what specific suggestions do you have to make this paper better organized?

Yes, she talks about certain topics in each paragraph. She talks about rush week, what she wants to know, what she already knows, and how she is an insider and outsider.

What suggestions do you have to make the content of this paper better?

Talk more about the sorority you want to be in. And why you have those stereotypes about the sororities. What interest you about sororities?

What do you think the strength of this paper is?

She is straight forward with all of the topics of each paragraph. She gives examples of what she talking about.

What are the weaknesses?

Description

What’s missing?

It lacks some detail and description

What’s unnecessary?

I feel she needs everything that stated in the story

Mark on the manuscript any important grammar/spelling mistakes.

Fill out the following chart, adding your comments about each component.

CRITERIA

READER'S COMMENTS

Weak Satisf. Strong

_____ _X__ _____ Thesis: clear, important, risky

Comments:

_____ _____ __X___ Evidence: relevance, strength, credibility

Comments: The essay was very strong and interesting

_____ _____ __X___ Organization: arrangement of ideas, guiding the reader

Comments:

_____ _____ __X__ Mechanics: spelling, grammar, punctuation

Comments: There weren’t many errors like 2 or 3

_____ __X___ _____ Overall effectiveness: Was the relationship between the author’s background and their subculture clear? Were you convinced of the effects?

Comments: There wasn’t much background information about her.

TOP 3 SUBCULTURES

NAME OF SUBCULTURE

1. Track and field: Throwers

• I always wanted to throw in high school but I felt a little out of place because everybody was so big; meaning that they had more muscle than I.
• I think throwers don't get enough credit for the hard work they go through to master their talent. And it's very interesting to watch their technique in all of their events.
• I would interview as many different individuals from every teams in the event and ask them question about how they prepare for events and why they choose throwing out of all events. And from an outsiders prespective I would ask them what interest them about the sport and what facts and information do they know about the sport.
• My only ethnical concern is probably what ethnical backgrounds enjoy the event the most and participates the most.
• If I can give back to the group I would support them by going to all of the games or I might take my interest into action and join the team next year.

2. Artist

• I like to look at pictures and last semester I learned alot about analyzing art and it made me get an interest for it.
• I think artists express themselves in manys ways. And their aren't afraid to do anything.
• I think would want to hangout with artists so I can get a real insight on their everyday activity. And I would want to know all of their opinions on social norms. And their out look on life. I would also ask outsiders what they think about artists and how do they feel about self expreesion.
• no
• If I had to give back to this group I would donate to the art gallerys. And I would go visit museums and admire their work.

3. Telecommunications Majors

• I like the major because it deals wit alot asects with the media. And I like to read magazine and listen to music.
• I think that the student who are involved in the major are lucky because once they pursue their career they'll know everything that will be going on in the media.
• I would interview different students who are pursuing different job within the media and see what their biases are within the media. I would also ask outsiders what they think about the media nowadays and do they think the new generation will change it.
• I would want to know the percentage of each racial background that is involved in the media and which shows get the most ratings.
• If I had to give back to this group I would buy more magazines and watch more tv shows and do anything to support the different aspects of the media.

Newspaper Article Paragraph

When it comes to being student activists to suppost people with cancer; their more than likely to know someone who has it. There are many students on BSU campus that support cancer patients. "My aunt just died from cancer and my hair dresser had breast cancer twice." There are some students who don't volunteer that still feel strongly about supporting cancer patients. "People who don't volunteer or support cancer patients don't do it on purpose and sometimes it depends on how personal people feel about the cause." I feel if people had the time to join organizations like the BSU Relay for Life for Cancer Patients they would but instead they are crammed with homework and sports teams that take up all of their time. Cancer patients are supported dearly mentally and physcially.

Box 3

BSU Relay for Life Committee

1. It talks about raising money for cancer patients and if the students around BSU campus get invloved in the relay, they will help raise money for cancer patients. Relay for Life wants people to become aware of how cancer is something thats affected everybody if not directly, then maybe they know someone with cancer or will meet someone in the future.
2. What is the purpose of the race?, How will the race help or/and affect cancer patients?, How often in the race held?, and How successful is the race?.
3. A fieldworker would get more in depth and detailed about the story. They would give interviews to cancer patients and ask them questions on how they think the race has better the care of cancer patients. And interview the committee to see their insight on the event and cancer patients. They want to know everything about the person and the subculture. A journalist would only write a story with who, what where, and why. They only give a basic story with out getting into too much detail.
4. The fieldworker would probably ask questions like what event is going on, who is sponsoring the event, where wil the event take place, who will be invloved in the event, why is the event being held, what is going to happen at the event, who is the event going to benefit, how long will the event take, and how successful is the event in the past years, what started the event.
5. The fieldworker will give interviews to insiders in the committee and the student who have participated in the race. They would give background information on the race like it's success in the past years. And they would show some videos of the race.
6. She would have to go to the place the race is held and the office that is in charge of the race and the committee. She can go on the internet to learn information about cancer and how the race has help the cancer patients.

List of Subcultures

1. Track and Field: Throwers
2. coaches
3. artists
4. T comm majors
5. emo
6. punks
7. Trendz of essence
8. fencing club
9. Grunge
10. goths
11. hippies
12. flappers
13. Womens Rugby
14. belly dance club
15. poetic Summit club
16. Storm chase team
17. quidditch league
18. Greasers
19. RA's
20. Muslim religion

REFLECTION

In House for the Homeless I liked the way she interview the different indivduals and got their story about their problems in life. But the one I like the most was when she talked to a girl named Hope. It seem as if she was really going through alot in her life. She had psychological problem that doctors couldn't diagnose. She dropped out of school and alot of things were just going so wrong in her life. But the author didn't belive her cause her stories weren't adding up. I felt like the author felt what the people were going through because she too was a immigrant and had to come to the USA with nothing. Another thing was the headline ,A Place to Hang Your Hat, made you think about having a home or a place to stay. She showed how some people from other countries come to the USA and they can't find jobs that they went to school for. I feel as if thats not fair!!!!

In Ralph's Sports Bar she talked about how there are different types of subcultures in one environment. And basically got into detail about the bar. she describe the signs and the rules that were hanging up nd how she didn't think he bar would have rules. She talked about the tables and the songs that were playing in the juke box. She seemed as if she was scared to interview the people in the bar because she didn't interview many people. She interview a lady named Alice that was the girlfriend of the owner of the bar. her and Alice worked together at a law firm. And she told her about all of the stereotypes in the bar and how they treated the women.
She showed the different situations that immigrants have to go through just to live in the so called Land of Opportunity and theres no opportunities for them but the really low income jobs that nobody else wants. How fair is that?!

Box 1

In high school I belonged to many subcultures but the main two were cheerleading and being one of the honor students. It felt like I was living two different lives in school. In cheerleading I had to be peppy and smile all day even if I was mad because when you are a cheerleader you have to set an example for the student body. Everybody thought we were fun to hang around and pretty. Basically we were popular in the school. But being an honor student was very hard for me. Everybody expected so much from us. For example when we went to spell bowls n academic bowls they expected us to win all competions. We were labeled as the "smart kids". And since I was a cheerleader people knew me but as for the other kids they were labeled as "lames". I thought they were fun to be around. They were just like the rest of the people I hung around. If I had to choose between the two I would be a Cheerleader because most of the cheerleaders were my bestfriends and they still are to this day. I had fun at practice even though they were hard. I loved the drive and teamwork from the team. I also loved cheering. I never thought I would be a cheerleader because I was such a tomboy but I actually loved it. It taught me discipline and determination.